Speaker 1: Consistency, and having consistent tone is all about detail, because again, you want to be creating flow, you want to be able to get them from one idea to the next. You need to absorb the reader, and you need to be selective so it remains consistent and continues to absorb the reader. You get a gauge in editing, if you find yourself stopping or feel that the mood starts to fade, you need to go back and have a look. So if I'm reading something, and suddenly I'm going, hang on, this isn't as powerful as it was in the start, then that's when I need to think about, okay, maybe I need to change some things. Editing is a huge part of this. You need to really think about making your tone consistent in the sense that I'm constantly feeling as I should be feeling throughout. If I should be feeling terrified, and then halfway through I feel bored, then something there needs to change, so I don't feel bored anymore, and I start to feel terrified again. It's something that's a really big weakness, and especially, and I do understand that when you're writing stories, that you get tired, that you get bored of writing them, that your hand starts to hurt, all of those things, and the effort that you put in at the end is often less than the effort you put in at the start, but it's still very good to just go back every now and then, even if it's just for five seconds, five minutes, and just have a very quick look, and just go, okay, I can probably change that. Especially if you're typing it up, there's no excuses then. Editing is a huge part of getting that consistency of tone, and it means that, again, it's about being immersive, it means that you're ready to get in there. So the care factor continues. The last thing you want is a teacher to go, oh, I don't care about this anymore, I'm just going to give them a mark and move on, because that means that they're going to give you a lower mark, not a higher mark. So let's look at two examples, ones that show a person's feeling sadness, one that does effectively, one that doesn't. The bad, feeling empty inside, he decided to walk around the resort. He looked at the jetty, at the boats, and the garden, he had lovelingly crafted from seedlings to baubles and beyond. We've gone here from one point to two, and the one problem with going from one point to two is that, by the end, we've got nothing about this emptiness inside. You could say, perhaps at this point, that it might be going metaphorically, but then it starts going into other descriptions, which are completely irrelevant. That person's feeling of sadness is lost, and instead we just get detail and description, which isn't needed. So we don't get lost in the moment at all, and it's a really bad quality to have in writing, especially when you have this emptiness, and we're starting to say, well, he's not feeling sad, he's feeling empty inside, that's a good description. And then it slowly just drifts off into nothingness, and we forget where we are. A good, he felt empty inside, a black hollowness that could not be filled by any attempt at leisure. It's repeating the same thing, and yet it's also going directly on it, we're still lost within it, and then we can continue to build on that, on that hollowness, that emptiness, all those things which are leading to sadness. It's a much better description. In this case, we've taken out the irrelevant details and shortened it. This is the economy of language right there. We haven't gone into any other details which don't need to be there, we're just purely focused on the economy. And this is exactly what you need to be thinking about when you're writing your work, is just having that economy of language and having all those things put together. Choosing the appropriate detail is about being selective, being mindful, and of course, editing is a key part of that. And make sure you do, even if it's not, and especially not just after you've finished writing. Obviously in the exam, even if you could give yourself a couple of minutes after you've finished writing it to sort of de-stress, unwind, and then go back to it, do that. In the case of any other story that you write, or any other piece of work that you write, you want to just take a step back and go back to it again. And that's basically about it, so until next time, I'll see you later.