Speaker 1: Hello everyone. Welcome to The Smart Student. My name is Chelsea Seaburn. Today's video is going to be an academic writing tutorial on how to develop a strong thesis statement. But first, are you a busy college student who doesn't have time for long video introductions? If so, go ahead and give this video a thumbs up and let's dive in. So what is a thesis statement? Well, a thesis statement is simply the position of your research. More formally stated, a thesis statement is a short statement that summarizes the main point or claim of a piece of academic writing. It is usually developed, supported, or explained within the text using examples and evidence. Think about it like this. Your thesis statement is the compass of your research paper. The purpose of it is to keep you on track and keep you focused so you don't go down random rabbit holes or tangents that pull away from the main argument of your paper. The qualities of a strong thesis statement is that it should be clear, concise, and complex. It should be clear, meaning that when someone reads your thesis statement, they know exactly what you were trying to say. It's concise because you use brief language to write it, meaning there's no fluff or BS in your statement. It's complex because it's a statement that goes beyond simple factor observation. In other words, your thesis statement has some depth to it. For formatting, your thesis statement is usually one to two sentences long and typically located at the end of your introduction. Before I walk you through an example, I want to talk about two things your thesis statement is not. Number one, your thesis statement is not your topic. So if your topic is World War II, World War II is not your thesis statement. Instead, your thesis statement would be the position you're taking on World War II. In other words, what about World War II are you going to be debating or discussing? Next, your thesis statement is not a fact about your topic either. It needs to be something that is debatable or arguable. And a fact, well, is a fact. They're usually pretty set in stone. So for example, World War II is known as the Golden Age of Aviation. That's a fact. No one's debating you there. So that's not your thesis statement. What about World War II as being the Golden Age of Aviation do you want to talk about? Something you can ask yourself is how or why? So in other words, why was World War II the Golden Age of Aviation or how did it become the Golden Age of Aviation? You can transform those into statements by saying World War II was the Golden Age of Aviation because or blank was the leading factor that contributed to World War II becoming the Golden Age of Aviation. So your thesis statement is not your topic. It's not a fact about your topic. It is the position you're taking from the research you've done on your topic. Got it? Okay, great. Now let's go ahead and walk through an example of actually crafting a good strong thesis statement. Step one is to identify your interesting topic. It's important that you select a topic that you hold at least some interest in because this is gonna motivate you and keep you going and engaged as you do your research. Step two, do some preliminary research to gain an understanding about your topic. I suggest reading through three to five articles or resources just so you can gain a basic understanding about the topic you've chosen. A quick note I'd like to make here is that when you're doing your preliminary research, you don't want to just make sure that your topic is interesting to you, but you want to make sure that your topic is researchable. There's nothing worse than choosing a topic that you hold interest in and you're excited about only to find later that it's really hard to write about because there's not enough information out there for you to research. Step three, come up with a strong research question. A good research question is a question about your research that sets you up in a way to either make a claim, take a stance, so that you can debate or argue it within your paper. If you need help coming up with a research question, be sure to check out this video up here. Step four, create a working thesis statement. So after you have your research question, you now want to come up with a working answer to that question. This is known as your working thesis statement. And as a rule of thumb, a good initial thesis statement contains three elements. Your topic, the position on your topic, and some evidence to support your position. Next, in step five, you want to continue your research. Having your working thesis statement is a great starting point, but you're gonna want to do more research. The goal is to find more evidence and examples to back up the answer or the position you're taking on your research question. Step six, write your strong thesis statement. Once you've done enough research to adequately take a strong position on your research question, now is the time to go ahead and draft your final thesis statement. Let's go ahead and take this example and see how it measures up for how strong of a thesis statement it actually is. So my final thesis statement is, Corgis as emotional support animals have positive impacts on self-esteem in people with depression because of their hurting mentality and loving nature. Why is this good? Well, as you can see, the three elements are present. You have the topic, which is depression, the position I'm taking on the topic, which is that Corgis as emotional support animals have positive impacts on self-esteem in people with depression, and then lastly, my evidence to support my position, which is because of their hurting mentality and loving nature. Something to note is that this statement is also debatable. Someone might say that Corgis are not good for people with depression because they are a high-energy breed and require a lot of maintenance and care. So overall, job well done. Step seven, revise. So as you do more research on your topic, you may find that your position on your topic changes. This is what's known as the evolution of your thesis statement. This is completely fine and actually normal, so if your position does change, don't be afraid to revise, revise, and revise some more. The only time you wouldn't revise is if you came up with your thesis statement after you did your research and already wrote your paper. As a rule of thumb, you don't want to get in the habit of doing that all the time, but hey, we've all been there, which is alright, and obviously you wouldn't change your thesis statement if you wrote it last. Anywho, I want to use the last portion of this video to give you my best tip and my framework that you can use when you're truly stuck and can't come up with your thesis statement. What I suggest doing is creating your working thesis statement using first-person language. In other words, in trying to make a formalized statement about your research, go ahead and just state it as your personal opinion. Because here's the thing, you can always go back and revise the first-person language out of your statement later, but oftentimes it's easier to say something from a personal standpoint. So what you want to do is ask yourself some challenging questions about your research. This is where that how and that why come into play, and then just write out your unfiltered responses. Even if you don't know why or what you're trying to say, go ahead and just let yourself say it, not worrying about grammar or sounding smart, because oftentimes when you allow yourself to flow, this is gonna uncover information that'll be useful to help you write that formalized thesis statement later. My framework you can use is a simple two-sentence template where you would fill in the blanks. The first sentence is, in this paper I will dot dot dot. The second sentence is, I believe this because dot dot dot. In that first sentence, this is the observation you've made in your research. In other words, it forces you to take your position. The second sentence, this is why it matters or what happened or why you made that observation. This, in other words, forces you to include some evidence to back up your position. So those together is a great way to come up with your working thesis statement. Let's go ahead and walk through an example, and I'll show you how you can take your working thesis statements and take the first-person language out of it so you can transform it into that good strong thesis statement. So let's say your topic is video game violence, and the research question you've come up with is, what are the lasting effects that violence in video games have on children? Using my framework, which uses the first-person language, you might come up with something like this. In this paper, I will discuss the fact that video game violence leaves young boys feeling like violence is okay and an acceptable behavior. I believe this because of the amount of young men that are responsible for mass shootings that happen. Now, that was the first thing that came to mind, and remember, you're going to draft a couple of these, so the purpose right now is to just let yourself flow. Something I want you to take note of is that I wasn't worried about trying to sound smart, I wasn't worried about proper grammar and etiquette, and I wasn't worried about offending anybody with my opinion or what my opinion actually was. I just let my brain flow with what came out naturally. Now, let's go ahead and draft a couple more using the same framework. I believe this because of the increasing rates of violence in middle schools. I believe this because it's damaging to normalize violence during such an impressionable age. I believe this because of the high rates of fights and bullying among boys in high school. Great, now that we have a few working thesis statements to work with, we now want to go back and revise the first-person language out of them and then formalize the tone. From these working thesis statements, my strong thesis statement might turn into something like this. Violence in modern video games makes children feel that violence is an acceptable behavior due to their consumption of video games during a crucial stage in early behavioral development. Again, this thesis statement is not set in stone. We can always change it and revise it later, but boy, I'm gonna say that's a pretty good starting point. That's a very strong, clear, concise, and complex thesis statement that you can base your research off. Anyways, if you've made it this far, congratulations. You're ready to go off on your own and create your own thesis statements. Matter of fact, if you come up with a good one, do me a favor and drop it in the comment section below so other people can use it as a resource to kick some ideas loose if they're stuck working on their thesis statements. Also, we have one week left in the smart student giveaway. 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